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13 January 2010 @ 07:23 pm
The wonder of it  
...is actually that I ever make diss progress with poems hitting me when I sit down at the keyboard :)

Not locking this one, though it's drafty, because I think its real place is here.

The wonder of it


The wonder of it is that anyone isn't
lost, I, peripheral
that anyone

is never the well I never how do you
say your name again how pretty (strange) your English
is so good your skin so are you really from how do you say that in
Indian never the things you (people) eat wear sing
and why, the man on the tech helpline today it wasn't
English and you know Jesus would never why would you
deserve what would you know
you about

never faking never peering in I wonder
should I (can't know) ask
what it's like?

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highlyeccentric: Beliefs and Ideashighlyeccentric on January 14th, 2010 03:45 am (UTC)
oh, that is *pretty* :)
Alex Haisthowl_at_the_sun on January 14th, 2010 04:58 am (UTC)
I wonder if the last question is ask what it's like not to be "other?"

I like.
shweta_narayanshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 05:07 am (UTC)
Pretty much, yeah.
:)
nancylebov: green leavesnancylebov on January 14th, 2010 11:49 am (UTC)
In case you actually want an answer, speaking as a person who usually isn't othered, it's restful.

I believe that "colorblindness" (white people refusing to mention race) was an ill-thought-out effort to offer the unmarked state.
shweta_narayanshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 10:13 pm (UTC)
it's restful.

That makes sense, and it makes sense you don't have to be on guard about this sort of thing all the time.
I don't know what that's like, though.
shweta_narayan: authorpic1shweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 10:19 pm (UTC)
I believe that "colorblindness" (white people refusing to mention race) was an ill-thought-out effort to offer the unmarked state.

That makes sense to me.
I'm not even sure it was ill-thought-out so much as based on misunderstanding in the first place -- after all, if we could really be unmarked rather than having well-meaning people pretend we were unmarked if we'd only play along, well, that would be good I think. But getting there is harder than let's-pretend.
shweta_narayan: happyshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 05:07 am (UTC)
Thankyou!
Adrienne: BOOKSLUTajodasso on January 14th, 2010 11:03 am (UTC)
The real effectiveness of this piece lies in the dizziness it causes the reader, a constant whirlwind of thought. Nice!
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 10:22 pm (UTC)
Thank you :)
It's sort of half the cacaphony, though. I wasn't able to get in the way I get the same thing from the other side the whole "You're not ver (real) Indian"; this side sort of took over...

Not sure whether that's a call for edits or to leave this one the way is and try again, or to try for a paired one, or.
Tithenai: veiltithenai on January 15th, 2010 12:59 pm (UTC)
YES to the dizziness, doubleplusYES to the "You're not ver (real) Indian" -- as someone who gets told by Arabs how un-Arab she looks, while told by non-Arabs how exotic she looks, while told by other non-Arabs "you're pretty white, aren't you?" while approached by Arabs and spoken to in Arabic without any preamble, YES to the dizzying.

What does it even MEAN, to say "you look this way," I wonder? Are we -- I say we because I know I do it too, and I don't know what it IS I'm doing -- measuring one person against an aggregation of our experiences interacting with people who have common features / skin-tone / hair / accents and seeing how they differ or don't? Or are we measuring that one person against a stereotype that is the result of a lack of experience, an amalgam of media representation that tells us this is how Indian women look, this how Syrian women look, this how Chinese women look? Do those things partake of each other?

Um. So, yes. Dizzying. As my scrawl no doubt makes abundantly clear. *hides*
Vvvvexation on January 16th, 2010 05:37 am (UTC)
A paired one would be nifty, I think.
Fiction Theoryfiction_theory on January 14th, 2010 12:20 pm (UTC)
I love your poetry so much. I hope one day I get to hold a physical collection of it in my hands. But until then I'll settle for the gorgeous offerings here on your LJ.

That's a powerful poem and I love the way the three phrases in the parentheses add up to whole poems themselves - I love all the searing implications and truths in this poem. I love that you know the sentences don't even need to be completed because those ides are so welded to us, culturally and through our interactions that we know them, we know where they're going.

In short, just incredible. You may actually be one of my very favorite poets and I'm always incredibly glad and grateful when you share your works with us.
shweta_narayan: happyshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 11:02 pm (UTC)
Wow, thank you!
It means a lot to me that you read and like my poetry -- and reading what you just said, a lot of things I was doing intuitively, without really knowing what they were, just popped into focus and made sense :)

So, basically, <3
Eric Marinericmarin on January 14th, 2010 03:25 pm (UTC)
I don't know about drafy, but it's a potent and effective poem, Shweta.
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 11:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you!


(So you know, I'm taking this as my might-one-day-have-managed-a LSS acceptance *cheeky grin*)
Eric Marinericmarin on January 14th, 2010 11:24 pm (UTC)
*grin*
Sovaysovay on January 14th, 2010 06:52 pm (UTC)
Not locking this one, though it's drafty, because I think its real place is here.

I don't know. I think you should send it out.
shweta_narayan: authorpic1shweta_narayan on January 14th, 2010 11:06 pm (UTC)
Thanks :)
I might, if there's a cool place that takes reprints that fits, etc.

But this came from the same place some of my more analytical posts do, namely, the need to have certain conversations. So it's primarily a lj post, to me. Does that make sense?
Sovaysovay on January 15th, 2010 04:58 am (UTC)
But this came from the same place some of my more analytical posts do, namely, the need to have certain conversations. So it's primarily a lj post, to me. Does that make sense

Yes; it does. It's very much in line with them. But in the selfish way of wanting to be able to point other people in the direction of good art, I'd like to see it with a wider audience than Livejournal; because it is good poetry as well as good thought.
Lenora Roselenora_rose on January 15th, 2010 04:04 am (UTC)
If this is drafty, I'd love to see how you could polish it up even more.

This kind of broken-phrase poetry rarely works for me, but this one did, because the effect is so integral. (I've too often seen it done for, as far as I can tell, "I read the beat poets and I thought it seemed cool" reasons).
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