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28 June 2010 @ 09:40 am
Courted: a dirge (funded!)  
Clarion 2010 has started -- and we've made the funding threshold for Courted: a dirge, with some extra rolling over for the next poem!

So -- here it is, posted a litle early because I'll be in a car at noon.

(ETA: tithenai  darlingly provided the title; I still didn't have one for it as of last week.)

Courted: a dirge
for Amal
When ice -- mere lace on tree and bone
fills up the cracks and cracks the stone
whose splinter-clouds rain bloody bright
against the queen of winter's white
you'll know -- by footprints on her skin
by frostbite -- by your pulse's din;
through ice-shard winds you'll stumble to
the queen of winter's rendezvous.
Neither love, this, nor abduction;
deathly beauty -- harsh seduction --
gem-hard, frozen firecrest
adorns the queen of winter's breast
and from some cigarette in bed
her heat will dance,  and wail, and spread
From trees to town to fire station --
winter queen's illumination.
All night long you'll keep your tryst
breathe out your warmth to make her mist
'round bodies, blackened walls -- and you
-- the queen of winter's rightful due.
While any blood runs through your heart
you'll do your captivated part;
past shivering -- past cold -- adrift
upon the queen of winter's gift.
Current Mood: cheerfulcheerful
Tithenai: veiltithenai on June 28th, 2010 04:45 pm (UTC)
*gleeee!* I love it. And what an excellent title. :p
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 04:46 pm (UTC)
*dies laughing, realizes should edit main entry*
wirewalking on June 28th, 2010 05:43 pm (UTC)
Ooh. Man I love when rhyme schemes look effortless.

Hi, by the by! I friended you a few weeks ago and forgot to say hello. I'm Nicole. We share ToC in CP3. Well met! :D
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 05:51 pm (UTC)
Waait I KNOW YOU! I am one of the proud owners of Demon Lovers & Other Difficulties :)

Er, hi! Amal & Claire talk about you so often I hadn't realized we hadn't met :)
wirewalking on June 28th, 2010 05:56 pm (UTC)
Heee. Whatever they say, it's every bit of it feelthy lies.

Was midway through typing "Will you be at Readercon?" when I got your comment to the other thingy saying you wouldn't be. Curses!
shweta_narayanshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 06:02 pm (UTC)
I'm in California and too sickly for plane flights.
wirewalking on June 28th, 2010 06:14 pm (UTC)
Aww. Next year maybe? Fingers crossed the sickliness gets itself gone forthwith. I can make shooing gestures at it if that'd help.
shweta_narayanshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 06:19 pm (UTC)
The sickly is pretty chronic. Next year I'm hoping to make wiscon, and I can't really think beyond one out-of-state con just now. But depending on where in the world I end up in a couple years, Readercon maybe convenient :)
Sherwood Smithsartorias on June 28th, 2010 06:30 pm (UTC)
WOW! Love...especially that second to the last stanza. WowowoWOW.
shweta_narayan: happyshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 08:10 pm (UTC)
Thank you :)
zwol on June 28th, 2010 07:57 pm (UTC)
Now I'm cold.

And I normally *like* being cold.
shweta_narayan: igglesshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 08:09 pm (UTC)
That's clearly cause you're too far from the fire.
zwol on June 28th, 2010 08:18 pm (UTC)
But you see, I cannot *stand* being hot.

(Also the fire comes with the burny death.)
shweta_narayanshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 08:21 pm (UTC)
Well yeah

The next poem will be less cold, assuming it gets funded *hint hint*
some guy named Larry: poetrylnhammer on June 28th, 2010 08:53 pm (UTC)

shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 28th, 2010 10:08 pm (UTC)
Thankya :)
Lenora Rose: Wheee!lenora_rose on June 28th, 2010 08:54 pm (UTC)
Didn't have a chance to fund this one as my credit card is right at its brink, but I'll be in for good money soon as I fix that (Tomorrow is the plan).

Especially if the others are half this good. Eeeeeeee.
Janni Lee Simner: another arctic foxjanni on June 28th, 2010 09:39 pm (UTC)
I'm doing final edits right now on a book that's all about winter and it's cold despair.

So thank you for this. :-)

Edited at 2010-06-29 03:07 am (UTC)
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 29th, 2010 03:56 am (UTC)
Thank you back! :)
asakiyume: ice thornasakiyume on June 29th, 2010 03:17 am (UTC)
This is gorgeous!

I love it.
shweta_narayan: happyshweta_narayan on June 29th, 2010 03:57 am (UTC)
Dichroicdichroic on June 29th, 2010 12:31 pm (UTC)
I just don't get why so many poetry venues are loathe to accept rhyming poems. I mean, I understand why they're thoroughly sick of badly-rhymed doggerel, but when you get a rhyming poem that's really well-done like this, there's nothing to top it.
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 29th, 2010 01:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
But ... uh... I understand it's because when one gets as much badly-rhymed doggerel as the slush piles hold, one starts to develop an allergy :)
Shawna Lenore Kastinshawnalenore on June 30th, 2010 04:38 am (UTC)
Oooh, this is so beautiful! You don't know me, but we were both in Goblin Delirium. I came here via tithenai's post and thought I'd say hello :)
shweta_narayan: mangatarshweta_narayan on June 30th, 2010 04:44 am (UTC)
Hallo! Thank you for coming by, and I'm really glad you like it!

I'll (hopefully!) be posting poems every mon/thurs for the next 6 weeks. I should really do a reference post about it...
Shawna Lenore Kastinshawnalenore on June 30th, 2010 04:52 am (UTC)
Cool! I look forward to more :)
Itinerant hacker adventuress: forest heart closethewronghands on June 30th, 2010 05:56 am (UTC)
I love this poem! Beautiful, evocative, unexpected. I'd be proud if I ever wrote anything half so well turned.